Draft Feedback

The main feedback I got from my draft was:

• Dress the models better, the clothes aren't stereotypical enough
• The article is too nice, the band need a bit of substance
• Change the background colour, it needs to be lighter
• Line things up better on the front cover
• The wavey style around the two models is nice, follow this theme.
• The contents page needs to stand out more.
• Don't use the frames on the photos
• The top photo needs a description
• The middle photo can't be used
• The magazine needs more pages
• The contents page needs a number
• Keep the main font used throughout
• Make the contents sound more exciting
• Add more to the list of bands e.g. pages and a blurb
• Change "They're new, They're young".
• Add more to the article, make it longer
• Stick with 2 columns per A4 page
• Maybe change the positioning of the picture.
• Change the framing of the photo.

I am going to take all of this into account when creating my final. I am going to make sure that i try different shot types when i'm reshooting, i have also decided to just use Ruby on my final because i can get more of a range of shots as well as being easier to edit around.

I am also going to make sure i make the background colour lighter and the main text colour more purple so it will look the same on all the computers, when i printed off my draft, the background looked too yellow.

I am also going to change some of the wording in my article and add a lot more questions and add an introduction to the band. I will also change the layout in order for it to be more stylised. When i'm creating my final DPS i will also add quotes to draw the reader in.

I am going to start my contents page again and add more photos to make it look fuller and appealing to my audience because this was the weakest part of my draft.